无老师精析：其实当我们在阅读作文的时候，总是会发现，我们与优秀作文的差距貌似不简简单单是用词的差距。而是同样的一句话，我们是这么说的，但是人家是那么说的。我们写的方式总是把我们脑中的中文，逐字的翻译成英文。但是实际上，慢慢的我们应该做的是将我们脑中的意思，找到英文地道的表达方式，然后直接表达出来，这是一个循序渐进的过程。
无老师满分范例: Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information. Although modern technology could equip us with easy access to information, the huge amount of resources would actually leave us discombobulated. Therefore, it is only left to possess information more quickly rather than learn it more quickly. An illustrating example is my experience with a HK digital library which stores almost all the books I desire. At first I enjoyed downloading them from the database. However, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardware yet none of them finished or ever clicked.
无老师优秀中文翻译:同样的,学生将会很容易的变得没有方向,在海量的信息面前。虽然当代的技术使得我们可以很容易的接触到信息，但是大量的信息会使得我们乱了方向。因此，我们只是更快的获得了这些信息，而不是更快的掌握了这些信息。一个最能说明问题的例子就是我在香港数字图书馆的经历，这个图书馆几乎储藏了所有我喜欢的书。最初，我喜欢从数据库下载这些信息。但是，一个月后，当数百本书被储存在我的硬件里，但是没有任何一本书被读完甚至都没有被点击过之后，我就终结了我的行为。
无老师平庸范例：Also, when we face plenty of information, students would easily lost their direction. Although the modern technology helps us get more information, so much information will distract us. So we just collect these information, but we do not absorb these information. The best example is the my experience in the HK digital library, this library almost have all the books that I like. At first, I liked to download these information. However, after a month, when hundreds of books were stored in my hardware and none of them were opened or even were clicked, I stop stopped this behavior.
首先第一句：优秀范例Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information.对比平庸范例Also, when we face plenty of information, students would easily lost their direction.我们就会发现人家优秀范例明明几个词就可以搞定的事情，平庸范例竟然用了一个从句！真是啰嗦！这里的优秀范例显然首先是become disoriented这里的disoriented这个合成词写的很形象，orient本身就是有“指引方向”的意思，前面加上了dis表示方向的迷失，然后再接下来有用了huge sea of，还真有一点mountain people， mountain sea的赶脚。O(∩_∩)O哈哈~平庸范例虽然写的都没错，但是语言拖沓，而且plenty of和lost their direction也只能是中规中矩，比起优秀范例，显然不在一个档次上。
接下来优秀范例说了Although modern technology could equip us with easy access to information, the huge amount of resources would actually leave us discombobulated.对比平庸范例Although the modern technology helps us get more information, so much information will distract us.显然优秀范例的equip和easy access to是最明显的亮点，这里equip是“装备某人”的意思，自然也就“使得某人有了XXX能力”，然后access to也是中国学生很少用到的固定搭配，这两个两点放在一起，真的是双剑合璧，光芒万丈！不过在接下来优秀范例的discombobulated显得略生僻了，不如平庸范例distract来得简单粗暴，还是让人有些遗憾的。
第三句：优秀范例Therefore, it is only left to possess information more quickly rather than learn it more quickly.对比平庸范例So we just collect these information, but we do not absorb these information.这里显然优秀范例的亮点是rather than这个固定搭配，使得平庸范例but，显得十分的罗嗦。但是反过来，平庸范例的两个动词collect与absorb，却是比优秀范例的动词possess与learn用的准确，这个点要仔细体会。
下面，优秀范例An illustrating example is my experience with a HK digital library which stores almost all the books I desire.对比平庸范例的The best example is the my experience in the HK digital library, this library almost have all the books that I like.优秀范例的前2大亮点在于illustrating example、HK digital library这两个部分，显示出作者的词汇量储藏很丰富，而且例子很具体，特别令人信服！然后的which从句与前一句链接很紧密，一气呵成，让人读起来颇有很顺畅的感觉。但是反观平庸范例的翻译只是在邯郸学步而已。best example是大家都知道的，HK digital library是直接复制过来的，this library单独成句，显然没有which从句的连贯性好。
倒数第二句，优秀范例At first I enjoyed downloading them from the database.对比平庸范例At first, I liked to download these information.，显然优秀范例的database显示出作者词汇量不错。
最后一句，优秀范例However, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardware yet none of them finished or ever clicked.对比平庸范例However, after a month, when hundreds of books were stored in my hardware and none of them were opened or even were clicked, I stop stopped this behavior.显然平庸范例写的也没错，但就是总让人感觉十分的笨拙。而且在这里，之所以感觉平庸范例与优秀范例差别不是特别大，主要是因为优秀范例哪怕翻译成中文，其实也是写得很好的，想想我们自己的中文，我们很有可能干巴巴的写的是“我下载了很多书，但是都没看”，但是这样就远没有，优秀范例的“一个月后，当数百本书被储存在我的硬件里，但是没有任何一本书被读完甚至都没有被点击过之后，我就终结了我的行为。”写得生动。因此，有些时候，优秀的作文不仅仅涉及到表达方式的丰富，而且还涉及到作者本身的文学素养或者说语言素养，如果本身中文就想不到这么写，那么自然英文写就无法流淌出精妙的语句。
无老师优秀中文翻译:同样的,学生将会很容易的变得没有方向,在海量的信息面前。虽然当代的技术使得我们可以很容易的接触到信息，但是大量的信息会使得我们乱了方向。因此，我们只是更快的获得了这些信息，而不是更快的掌握了这些信息。一个最能说明问题的例子就是我在香港数字图书馆的经历，这个图书馆几乎储藏了所有我喜欢的书。最初，我喜欢从数据库下载这些信息。但是，一个月后，当数百本书被储存在我的硬件里，但是没有任何一本书被读完甚至都没有被点击过之后，我就终结了我的行为。
无老师平庸范例：Also, when we face plenty of information, students would easily lost their direction. Although the modern technology helps us get more information, so much information will distract us. So we just collect these information, but we do not absorb these information. The best example is the my experience in the HK digital library, this library almost have all the books that I like. At first, I liked to download these information. However, after a month, when hundreds of books were stored in my hardware and none of them were opened or even were clicked, I stop stopped this behavior.
首先第一句：优秀范例Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information.对比平庸范例Also, when we face plenty of information, students would easily lost their direction.我们就会发现人家优秀范例明明几个词就可以搞定的事情，平庸范例竟然用了一个从句！真是啰嗦！这里的优秀范例显然首先是become disoriented这里的disoriented这个合成词写的很形象，orient本身就是有“指引方向”的意思，前面加上了dis表示方向的迷失，然后再接下来有用了huge sea of，还真有一点mountain people， mountain sea的赶脚。O(∩_∩)O哈哈~平庸范例虽然写的都没错，但是语言拖沓，而且plenty of和lost their direction也只能是中规中矩，比起优秀范例，显然不在一个档次上。
接下来优秀范例说了Although modern technology could equip us with easy access to information, the huge amount of resources would actually leave us discombobulated.对比平庸范例Although the modern technology helps us get more information, so much information will distract us.显然优秀范例的equip和easy access to是最明显的亮点，这里equip是“装备某人”的意思，自然也就“使得某人有了XXX能力”，然后access to也是中国学生很少用到的固定搭配，这两个两点放在一起，真的是双剑合璧，光芒万丈！不过在接下来优秀范例的discombobulated显得略生僻了，不如平庸范例distract来得简单粗暴，还是让人有些遗憾的。
第三句：优秀范例Therefore, it is only left to possess information more quickly rather than learn it more quickly.对比平庸范例So we just collect these information, but we do not absorb these information.这里显然优秀范例的亮点是rather than这个固定搭配，使得平庸范例but，显得十分的罗嗦。但是反过来，平庸范例的两个动词collect与absorb，却是比优秀范例的动词possess与learn用的准确，这个点要仔细体会。
下面，优秀范例An illustrating example is my experience with a HK digital library which stores almost all the books I desire.对比平庸范例的The best example is the my experience in the HK digital library, this library almost have all the books that I like.优秀范例的前2大亮点在于illustrating example、HK digital library这两个部分，显示出作者的词汇量储藏很丰富，而且例子很具体，特别令人信服！然后的which从句与前一句链接很紧密，一气呵成，让人读起来颇有很顺畅的感觉。但是反观平庸范例的翻译只是在邯郸学步而已。best example是大家都知道的，HK digital library是直接复制过来的，this library单独成句，显然没有which从句的连贯性好。
倒数第二句，优秀范例At first I enjoyed downloading them from the database.对比平庸范例At first, I liked to download these information.，显然优秀范例的database显示出作者词汇量不错。
最后一句，优秀范例However, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardware yet none of them finished or ever clicked.对比平庸范例However, after a month, when hundreds of books were stored in my hardware and none of them were opened or even were clicked, I stop stopped this behavior.显然平庸范例写的也没错，但就是总让人感觉十分的笨拙。而且在这里，之所以感觉平庸范例与优秀范例差别不是特别大，主要是因为优秀范例哪怕翻译成中文，其实也是写得很好的，想想我们自己的中文，我们很有可能干巴巴的写的是“我下载了很多书，但是都没看”，但是这样就远没有，优秀范例的“一个月后，当数百本书被储存在我的硬件里，但是没有任何一本书被读完甚至都没有被点击过之后，我就终结了我的行为。”写得生动。因此，有些时候，优秀的作文不仅仅涉及到表达方式的丰富，而且还涉及到作者本身的文学素养或者说语言素养，如果本身中文就想不到这么写，那么自然英文写就无法流淌出精妙的语句。