无老师优秀范例：Admittedly, it is undeniable that within the range of school, the teaching quality mainly due to the influence of teachers in class. In the first place, teacher would be responsible for all different kinds of courses absorbed by the students, to name a few, physics, mathematics and English. These subjects and technology would be of vital importance for the career path and intelligence development of children. What’s more, teachers would also make impact on student’s mental health. For example, they need to provide guidance and mental caring especially when students are facing with obstacles and difficulties in their lives. To some extent, increasing in the compensation of educators would make them more committed as well as focused on the main task of their teaching thus increasing the quality of education.
无老师优秀中文翻译：必须承认，我们不可否认的是在学校范围内，教学的质量主要是取决于在班级里面教师的影响力。最初，教师会负责学生学的各种各样的课程，比如说物理，数学和英语。这些科目和技术对于孩子们未来的职业发展和开智起着至关重要的作用。不仅如此，教师还要为学生们的精神健康起着很大的影响作用。比如，他们需要提供咨询和心理照护，尤其当学生们面临生活当中的障碍和困难的时候。在某种程度上，增加教育的补偿，将会使他们更加的专注，而且也更会他们的主业，教学上，这样也会提升教育的质量。
无老师平庸范例：We have to admit that it is undeniable that in the school the teaching quality depends on the influence energy of teacher in the classroom. At first, teachers may be responsible for different class, such as, physics, mathematics and English. These class and technology will help these children’s working development and help their brain importantly. Besides, teachers may have a lot of influence in students’ thinking health. For example, they would give guide and thinking care, especially when students meet obstruction and difficulty. In some extent, increasing compensation will make them more focusing, and more focus on their main job that is teaching, and will increase the teaching quality.
好作文，一定是多个角度都有自己的特长，今天无老师就从不同的2个角度来对其进行剖析，在此之前，我们更多关注的是遣词造句，今天我们再加一点，就是关注里面的逻辑。而且，今天无老师有绞尽脑汁的，在平庸范例里模仿了很多小伙伴们的常见错误，不知道小伙伴们看到没有。没看出来？那咱们一句一句来说。
第一句，优秀范例说的是Admittedly, it is undeniable that within the range of school, the teaching quality mainly due to the influence of teachers in class.平庸范例写的就很水了We have to admit that it is undeniable that in the school the teaching quality depends on the influence energy of teacher in the classroom.其实说话这个事情，谁都害怕啰嗦，你本来可以一个词就能说明白的，就没必要2个词，其实我们很多时候，就是因为不知道简洁明了的用法，而写了很多无用的东西。这里优秀案例的Admittedly对比平庸案例的We have to admit就属于此类。再接下来优秀案例的within the range of school对比平庸范例的in the school，就显得平庸范例的in the school十分的小学生化，感觉就像是“尽享心灵的家园”与“我喜欢这个”的区别。接下来的优秀范例mainly due to与平庸范例的depends on其实差别不大，但是作为凤尾的mainly due to与作为鸡头depends on因为环境不同，给人的感觉也感觉mainly due to高了一点点，主要是增加了表达方式的多样性。最后就是平庸范例的influence energy其实很有趣，这就是典型的，我们在写英文的时候，经常是将中文僵硬的一对一的翻译成英文，而不管人家英文之中是否是这样说的，influence energy就是很典型的影响（力），其实在英文之中influence本身就有（力）这层含义，其实是不需要写energy的，但是当我们只是一对一翻译的时候，就容易写出influence energy这种表达方式。总而言之，既然是在写英文，就要想想人家英文本来是怎么写的，而不要僵化的一对一翻译。
第二句，优秀范例In the first place, teacher would be responsible for all different kinds of courses absorbed by the students, to name a few, physics, mathematics and English.对比平庸范例At first, teachers may be responsible for different class, such as, physics, mathematics and English.在本句，句子一开始就亮出In the first place，直接就亮出了一条逻辑线，告诉读者，我这个是有逻辑顺序的，我这里要铺垫开头了。本句精巧的地方在于3点，第一点是be responsible for这个固定搭配，第二点是absorbed by the students，第三点是to name a few。第一点的be responsible for这没什么可说的。第二点的absorbed by the students非常有趣，其实当我们自己来写文章的时候，往往是写到different kinds of courses也就够了，不会写absorbed by the students，但是当在这里写了absorbed by the students之后，我们就会发现这里增强了对于课程的逻辑的描述，也就是起到了再次强调这个课程对于学生本身的帮助作用，是的句子的逻辑性变得更连贯，以下是的前后文的内容进行了更好的连接。而第三点的to name a few更有趣，因为我们想一下，这个部分如果翻译过来的话，最好就翻译为“我们可以提几个，比如说有”，反思一下，我们马上就会发现，其实这里跟for example的作用是一样的，都是引起下文的例子的作用，但是用to name a few，显然是摆脱了千篇一律的for example，使得文章多样性增加。反观平庸范例，就是四平八稳，没有任何的亮点。
第三句，优秀范例亮出These subjects and technology would be of vital importance for the career path and intelligence development of children.而平庸范例的These class and technology will help these children’s working development and help their brain importantly.就很low了。首先优秀范例的subject又是显示了作者用词的多样性，点个小赞。不过接下来的be of vital importance for和career path就要点大赞了！因为be of vital importance for显然是没有用平凡的important，而且还用一个vital来修饰importance，来强调其非常高的重要性等级。大赞！而career path则是显示出作者的阅读量很好，做了一个很好的用词准确的范例。然后最后的intelligence development of children则是与career path并列，显得逻辑性非常的顺畅。但是平庸范例再一次尽显自己词汇量贫乏的特点，working development令人不知所云，help their brain也是写的非常的模糊，到底怎样帮助大脑，让人一头雾水。至于在逻辑性则体现在These subjects的These本身起到的作用就是对于前文的courses和physics, mathematics and English进行了呼应，告诉每一位读者，我还是在说课程这件事情。
第四句，优秀范例短小精悍What’s more, teachers would also make impact on student’s mental health.对比平庸范例Besides, teachers may have a lot of influence in students’ thinking health.显然句子开头的What’s more就是在告诉所有人，我在这句话是对于上面一句话的进一步阐述。而且优秀范例的would也很准确，即表示出教师的责任，同时也体现出教师的一种期望，就是要影响学生。而且优秀范例的make impact on相比于平庸范例的a lot of influence也更为准确和书面！很显然什么叫做a lot of influence一堆影响？真的是很少见到英语里会这么说，完全是生硬的自创性翻译。最后的对比就更为明显了，平庸范例的thinking health对比优秀范例的mental health，显然就是平庸范例的作者阅读量太贫乏，根本就不知道在英语里怎样表示“精神健康”，因此情急之下，就写出了thinking health“思考健康”这样的表达。
第五句，优秀范例要举例了！开头的For example就是直接跟前一句关联起来，告诉读者，我在这句话要对前一句话进行举例了！For example, they need to provide guidance and mental caring especially when students are facing with obstacles and difficulties in their lives.平庸范例写的是For example, they would give guide and thinking care, especially when students meet obstruction and difficulty.在这里显然优秀范例的作者示范擅长于动词的名词化，因此写出了provide guidance and mental caring这样的表达方式，否则很有可能就写guide sb这样的表达方式了。而且为了追求表达方式的多样化和准确性，没有再用mental health，而是用了mental caring。至于最后的obstacles and difficulties就是词汇量丰富使然了。
当当当~~~~最后一句，优秀范例To some extent, increasing in the compensation of educators would make them more committed as well as focused on the main task of their teaching thus increasing the quality of education.对比平庸范例In some extent, increasing compensation will make them more focusing, and more focus on their main job that is teaching, and will increase the teaching quality.又是一开头，就亮出逻辑To some extent（在某种程度上），表明本句话，是对于前面一句话进行进一步解释。而且educators 也是紧扣前面的teacher和student，逻辑连贯性非常好！increasing in the compensation of educators又是尽显作者的名词化的本领，因为很多时候，名词化既代表着书面化，也就是好！而且接下来的more committed也显示出作者词汇量丰厚。而且作者还用了as well as来表示并列，而不是用传统的and，也是阅读量丰厚使然。而且在最后还用了main task一个main就有显示出内容的层次很丰富，因为这是最主要的任务。
针对很多小伙伴不知道如何提升自己作文的逻辑性，无老师在本文特地加入了对于逻辑性的讲解，希望能对更多的小伙伴有所帮助。
无老师平庸范例：We have to admit that it is undeniable that in the school the teaching quality depends on the influence energy of teacher in the classroom. At first, teachers may be responsible for different class, such as, physics, mathematics and English. These class and technology will help these children’s working development and help their brain importantly. Besides, teachers may have a lot of influence in students’ thinking health. For example, they would give guide and thinking care, especially when students meet obstruction and difficulty. In some extent, increasing compensation will make them more focusing, and more focus on their main job that is teaching, and will increase the teaching quality.
好作文，一定是多个角度都有自己的特长，今天无老师就从不同的2个角度来对其进行剖析，在此之前，我们更多关注的是遣词造句，今天我们再加一点，就是关注里面的逻辑。而且，今天无老师有绞尽脑汁的，在平庸范例里模仿了很多小伙伴们的常见错误，不知道小伙伴们看到没有。没看出来？那咱们一句一句来说。
第一句，优秀范例说的是Admittedly, it is undeniable that within the range of school, the teaching quality mainly due to the influence of teachers in class.平庸范例写的就很水了We have to admit that it is undeniable that in the school the teaching quality depends on the influence energy of teacher in the classroom.其实说话这个事情，谁都害怕啰嗦，你本来可以一个词就能说明白的，就没必要2个词，其实我们很多时候，就是因为不知道简洁明了的用法，而写了很多无用的东西。这里优秀案例的Admittedly对比平庸案例的We have to admit就属于此类。再接下来优秀案例的within the range of school对比平庸范例的in the school，就显得平庸范例的in the school十分的小学生化，感觉就像是“尽享心灵的家园”与“我喜欢这个”的区别。接下来的优秀范例mainly due to与平庸范例的depends on其实差别不大，但是作为凤尾的mainly due to与作为鸡头depends on因为环境不同，给人的感觉也感觉mainly due to高了一点点，主要是增加了表达方式的多样性。最后就是平庸范例的influence energy其实很有趣，这就是典型的，我们在写英文的时候，经常是将中文僵硬的一对一的翻译成英文，而不管人家英文之中是否是这样说的，influence energy就是很典型的影响（力），其实在英文之中influence本身就有（力）这层含义，其实是不需要写energy的，但是当我们只是一对一翻译的时候，就容易写出influence energy这种表达方式。总而言之，既然是在写英文，就要想想人家英文本来是怎么写的，而不要僵化的一对一翻译。
第二句，优秀范例In the first place, teacher would be responsible for all different kinds of courses absorbed by the students, to name a few, physics, mathematics and English.对比平庸范例At first, teachers may be responsible for different class, such as, physics, mathematics and English.在本句，句子一开始就亮出In the first place，直接就亮出了一条逻辑线，告诉读者，我这个是有逻辑顺序的，我这里要铺垫开头了。本句精巧的地方在于3点，第一点是be responsible for这个固定搭配，第二点是absorbed by the students，第三点是to name a few。第一点的be responsible for这没什么可说的。第二点的absorbed by the students非常有趣，其实当我们自己来写文章的时候，往往是写到different kinds of courses也就够了，不会写absorbed by the students，但是当在这里写了absorbed by the students之后，我们就会发现这里增强了对于课程的逻辑的描述，也就是起到了再次强调这个课程对于学生本身的帮助作用，是的句子的逻辑性变得更连贯，以下是的前后文的内容进行了更好的连接。而第三点的to name a few更有趣，因为我们想一下，这个部分如果翻译过来的话，最好就翻译为“我们可以提几个，比如说有”，反思一下，我们马上就会发现，其实这里跟for example的作用是一样的，都是引起下文的例子的作用，但是用to name a few，显然是摆脱了千篇一律的for example，使得文章多样性增加。反观平庸范例，就是四平八稳，没有任何的亮点。
第三句，优秀范例亮出These subjects and technology would be of vital importance for the career path and intelligence development of children.而平庸范例的These class and technology will help these children’s working development and help their brain importantly.就很low了。首先优秀范例的subject又是显示了作者用词的多样性，点个小赞。不过接下来的be of vital importance for和career path就要点大赞了！因为be of vital importance for显然是没有用平凡的important，而且还用一个vital来修饰importance，来强调其非常高的重要性等级。大赞！而career path则是显示出作者的阅读量很好，做了一个很好的用词准确的范例。然后最后的intelligence development of children则是与career path并列，显得逻辑性非常的顺畅。但是平庸范例再一次尽显自己词汇量贫乏的特点，working development令人不知所云，help their brain也是写的非常的模糊，到底怎样帮助大脑，让人一头雾水。至于在逻辑性则体现在These subjects的These本身起到的作用就是对于前文的courses和physics, mathematics and English进行了呼应，告诉每一位读者，我还是在说课程这件事情。
第四句，优秀范例短小精悍What’s more, teachers would also make impact on student’s mental health.对比平庸范例Besides, teachers may have a lot of influence in students’ thinking health.显然句子开头的What’s more就是在告诉所有人，我在这句话是对于上面一句话的进一步阐述。而且优秀范例的would也很准确，即表示出教师的责任，同时也体现出教师的一种期望，就是要影响学生。而且优秀范例的make impact on相比于平庸范例的a lot of influence也更为准确和书面！很显然什么叫做a lot of influence一堆影响？真的是很少见到英语里会这么说，完全是生硬的自创性翻译。最后的对比就更为明显了，平庸范例的thinking health对比优秀范例的mental health，显然就是平庸范例的作者阅读量太贫乏，根本就不知道在英语里怎样表示“精神健康”，因此情急之下，就写出了thinking health“思考健康”这样的表达。
第五句，优秀范例要举例了！开头的For example就是直接跟前一句关联起来，告诉读者，我在这句话要对前一句话进行举例了！For example, they need to provide guidance and mental caring especially when students are facing with obstacles and difficulties in their lives.平庸范例写的是For example, they would give guide and thinking care, especially when students meet obstruction and difficulty.在这里显然优秀范例的作者示范擅长于动词的名词化，因此写出了provide guidance and mental caring这样的表达方式，否则很有可能就写guide sb这样的表达方式了。而且为了追求表达方式的多样化和准确性，没有再用mental health，而是用了mental caring。至于最后的obstacles and difficulties就是词汇量丰富使然了。
当当当~~~~最后一句，优秀范例To some extent, increasing in the compensation of educators would make them more committed as well as focused on the main task of their teaching thus increasing the quality of education.对比平庸范例In some extent, increasing compensation will make them more focusing, and more focus on their main job that is teaching, and will increase the teaching quality.又是一开头，就亮出逻辑To some extent（在某种程度上），表明本句话，是对于前面一句话进行进一步解释。而且educators 也是紧扣前面的teacher和student，逻辑连贯性非常好！increasing in the compensation of educators又是尽显作者的名词化的本领，因为很多时候，名词化既代表着书面化，也就是好！而且接下来的more committed也显示出作者词汇量丰厚。而且作者还用了as well as来表示并列，而不是用传统的and，也是阅读量丰厚使然。而且在最后还用了main task一个main就有显示出内容的层次很丰富，因为这是最主要的任务。
针对很多小伙伴不知道如何提升自己作文的逻辑性，无老师在本文特地加入了对于逻辑性的讲解，希望能对更多的小伙伴有所帮助。